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I went to the park.
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On Saturday afternoon me and my family went to the park in Kaikohe.
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I felt excited when I got to the park.
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When we got to the park we saw the swings and the playground.
I said to my mum and dad, “This is cool here.”
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The first thing I did at the park was I played on the swing.
I felt very pumped up like a balloon in the air.
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Next we played on the slide and it was fun as.
I said to myself, “This is very awesome.”
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After that we had a race around the park.
I had a cool time at the park.
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